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A ghostly tale set in the trenches of World War One.    
#10 in Paranormal  •  #23 in Fiction
1 part / 7 pages, updated Nov 24, 2013
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GALACTIC WARFARE, ADVENTURE, POLITICAL INTRIGUE, TREACHERY, DECEPTION AND HEROISM, these are just a few of the elements ...
#49 in Science Fiction
1 part / 93 pages, updated Nov 18, 2013
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GALACTIC WARFARE, ADVENTURE, POLITICAL INTRIGUE, TREACHERY, DECEPTION AND HEROISM, these are just a few of the elements ...
#10 in Science Fiction
1 part / 93 pages, updated Dec 28, 2013

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User 12345 commented on your bite Trenches
Hi 44147,
This story is approached through a great topic. You develop the narrative very well, and it is engaging in terms of language. If I were you, I would experiement with writing this perhaps in the third person, and in the past tense. There is a quality about this good narrative that - in the present tense - undermines the quality topic and development of story. I think that the reader knows the battle is the past tense, and, as it is not a diary, needs to be narrated in the past tense. Keep experimenting with this one.
Regards,
Writer 12345.
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